Hello Sumojo

Yours was the entry before mine for this week's "I Write in 2021" challenge so I'm here to do your review.


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
You really did slam Cupid, big time, with this poem of yours.

You wrote a poem for the Bard's Hall Contest and the goal was having it merit a 1 star review. This makes reviewing a bit tricky but I have the duration of this review to think about what star to assign it. In the spirit of the contest, instead of going in my normal generous vein, I'll try to be as stingy as possible with your stars... so if you get a low rating, that means you did a great job. But I can only go so low! I just don't have it in me to award one star.


MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Your poem is perfectly geared towards the contest that you entered it in. I entered that contest too and I wrote a bad poem for it but, in my opinion, I didn't slam Cupid nearly as well as you did.

Your form and rhyming look good. I didn't actually notice any errors. It's hard to write bad on purpose.

Your poem is well written.

Your ending is harsh (SNAP! SLAM! BAM!) but perfect for the contest. You really threw down on that one!

I liked how you structured your poem.

I didn't notice any mistakes in your poem.

In the spirit of helpfulness, I'd love to offer a suggestion for improvement, but I can't think of anything constructive (to make it worse, I suppose you could have spelled things wrong or had some grammatical errors but I don't think that was necessary).

Your poem made me wonder how the judges scored it. I suspect you got the "coveted" one star. Did you win? I think you might have! I should check the results.


CONCLUSION:
You wrote a definitely anti-Cupid poem that I enjoyed reading. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your slam Cupid poem with the writing.com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler

PS Ironically, I'm using a cupid in my signature.


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