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| (4.5)  Greetings, Elfin Dragon-finally published! I am reviewing this because I am part of "Merit Badge Exchange" .  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.What I Liked  What a story! Wow. Your life has had its ups and downs and you've managed your way through it! I admire you for your honesty. I feel strongly about sharing experiences such as yours. Knowing others have gone through something similar, is for some reason reassuring. Mental illness seems to be all over the place nowadays. People used to hide it or perhaps it would come out in other ways, such as starting fires. All I know is, back when I suffered through anxiety attacks, before cell phones and home computers, I didn't know a soul who'd experienced the same thing I was going through. Now, it's like almost everyone I know has had that experience. I think it's is good that people are more open, as it's helpful to others and therapeutic for the person sharing the experience.Suggestions to Consider In Paragraph 1: It pulls people in people in  It pulls people in people in At least I don't think you meant to repeat it.  In Paragraph 6: that through His path is narrow that though His path is narrow I think you meant 'though', not 'through'. Final Thoughts You followed the prompt nicely. The Bible verses worked perfectly with your story. You are an amazing person! Best of luck in the contest! Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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