A life time of holidays [E] A poem reflecting how vacation choices change with age. |
Greetings, Sumojo! I am reviewing this because I am part of "Merit Badge Exchange" . First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. What I Liked Wow, I loved the the ladder of vacation choices as we grow older! I like how you showcase each age group by stanzas divided by icons, each signifying something to do with vacations (beach, car, plane, and boat.) I felt you did a good job of covering each group, too! I never thought about how our vacation preferences chance, actually, but you are right on! The appearance of this piece is appealing. Centering it and including double-spacing within each stanza, makes it pleasant to look at and easy to read. That also includes the larger text. Thank you for that!!! I've yet to go on a cruise, but maybe someday. I love the idea of all the good food and drink I can enjoy! I'm a little nervous about a cruise though. I will fly in a plane, but I'm not crazy about it. I like traveling in a vehicle, the best. Loved how you ended this. At first I thought the wheelies referred to a wheelchair with a case attached. Then I realized you were talking about the wheels on the suitcases. My bad. I'm thinking too far ahead. Your words were clear, my mind is still refueling on coffee. Suggestions to Consider I like it exactly as it is! No suggestions. Final Thoughts This was a creative piece! I'm very impressed. Best of luck in the contest! Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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