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lodestar contest part 2 & 4 entry
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Looking for a guiding light. May 2024 round is open, looking for short stories.
#2130938 by Satuawany Author IconMail Icon


*Starw* Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW*

Overall Impression: A great use of the prompt! Poor John, that's a long time to be alone!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:

1. In this section - the cultures they base had in stock - you may want to change "they" to "the".

Readability: A great first draft, an easy and enjoyable read.

Suggestions: My only suggestion would be to find one or two synonyms for "hallucination" so that "hallucination" isn't so repetitive throughout the story.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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