Hi Sumojo -

This is a review for Part 3 of

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The Lodestar Contest  (13+) Looking for a guiding light. May 2024 round is open, looking for short stories. #2130938 by Satuawany

Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them!

Overall Impression: Great use of the prompt! Personally, I think Sean got what he deserved!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome!

In this section - ducking each other under the water - is it "ducking" or "dunking"? Or, does it depend on where you live?

Readability: An interesting little read, the ending was not what I expected which is always enjoyable.

Suggestions: A first draft is always hard to judge, but nothing stood out that needed fixing.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina




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