L'aura del Campo [13+] Online journal capturing the moment and the memory of moments. A meadow meditation. |
Greetings, , I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest " . First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. Visually appealing Easy to understand Followed the prompt & rules Summary: A peek in at the ice skating rink at night with various visuals of skaters in their winter ware and ice skates. Characters: Children and adults Setting: Outdoors ice skating rink in the evening Technicalities: I really couldn't find anything to comment on or suggest. I might've italicized Wow. at the end, but that's only a personal preference on my part. Favorites: There is so much to like about this piece! Your imagery is very well done. It's almost like a painting with so much going on! Or a jigsaw puzzle (which I'm hooked on doing right now)! I will mention a few favorites, though I enjoyed it all: Time to put on gloves and furry hats and wrap scarves 'round our necks. Our boots are black and white and pink, and at the skating rink ice is smooth and slick. Little kids in woollen sweaters twirl as older couples swirl Auntie Anna in her yoga pants scrawls a figure eight, then jumps and seems to levitate! Final thoughts: I'm becoming quite a fan of your writing! This is a fabulous piece filled with visuals of so much going on in the early night at a skating rink. It makes me want to be part of it! When I was young, I used to walk to the ice skating rink with my skates and go round and round and round with all the other people. There was an old wooden shack called The Hot House that had a heater in the center of the room for people to warm up with, along with benches lined against the walls where one could put on or take off their skates. I am impressed! Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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