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 | You Never Walk Alone  [E] A poem to remind you that you are not alone in whatever you do.  |
| (4.0)  Greetings, Aubrey's Play! I am reviewing this because I discovered it in Random Reviews.  I'd also like to welcome you to Writing.com, as I see you are quite new! First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.What I Liked  I liked your rhyme scheme of a/b/a/c which is less used in comparison to a/b/c/b. It's refreshing to read something unique. My favorite lines are:Sometimes everything will feel like an air raid But after the storm, after the chaos, your rainbow will shine Suggestions to Consider Not too much to suggest other than you might consider uncapping some of the beginning of your lines that are continuations from the previous lines. One example is:Every step you take, every decision you make Is a step closer toward your dream Perhaps try... Every step you take, every decision you make is a step closer toward your dream It's not really a correction that I'm suggesting, mostly an option.  Final Thoughts Your message is a strong one. Hope you are enjoying the site!Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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