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I wonder... Open in new Window. [E]
A Regency lady searches for her missing shawl and makes a delightful discovery.
by HollyMerry Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Initial Thoughts: While reading this I picture the scenery to be a wealthy British estate, from possibly the 18th century. Servants rushing into rooms, trying to finish preparing for the dinner party. To be quite honest, I love this sort of setting.

Favorite Part:

‘How odd! I do hope the shawl is found soon. You don’t suppose there is anything the matter with Topsy? She’s been behaving strangely of late and has grown oddly plump.’

‘It will be the cream that the dairymaid gives her most likely, Ma‘am. She’s such a muddle-headed girl. I’ve told here time and again not to feed Topsy. She just can’t resist giving the dog a bowlful of cream when she comes fawning with that handsome feathery tail of hers wagging faster than you can whisk eggs.’


It's funny because I actually guessed that the dog was having puppies just because my mother had told me about working at a pet shop and having a manual that talked about these sorts of things. She gave me the manual and I read about this. I do find the situation a bit silly, so props with that!

Positive Feedback: I love that the problem starts out with a missing shawl, then the reading focuses on a girl who is curious quite often and the problem about Topsy. That's a very nice way to get the reader to think about all of these and maybe even try to put the pieces together. It's also nice that in conversation, you've managed to hint that the dog may have been pregnant because mothers before birth tend to feel the need the shy away and get lazy. I don't blame them, after all, they are giving birth to about four puppies.

Issues: Slight overlook of spelling errors. Also a bit hard to read. Make sure in future works to space out each paragraph so it can be easier on the eyes.

Overall: Just a question. If the Topsy hid to give birth, how did the puppies find the shawl? Maybe I'm overthinking this one bit, but it does seem interesting. I hope none of them got lost! Nice story!

Keep Writing!
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