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The Black Cat's Tale Open in new Window. [E]
A Locked Shop, A Tardy Shopkeeper, and Trinkets.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Not a bad story with an interesting denouement leading into a fantasy realm. I also liked the way you used his Welsh name, and not the English version we are bombarded with.

Now, I only review things at WdC I like, and so, with that in mind:
Technically:
*There are a few misused and missing pieces of punctuation.
*There are a number of missing capital letters (especially in direct speech).
*A few words are repeated close to one another, giving the writing an odd feel.
Story-wise:
*The tea-drinking was important, but it felt over-done.
*The cat is called 'Tabby', then was "black". Or is this a different cat? It felt like the same one.

But I did like the idea of awakening an old life, a past life into the present. It almost felt like a prologue, ready for something grander.

Nicely done story.

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