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Given: Apr 28, 2020 at 8:34pm
Length: 1,152 Characters |
859 w/o WritingML
Introduction~
Cadie here reivewing Lesson 3 for Building Emotion.
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Personal Impressions~
Your story takes an interesting twist. Good job
Plot, Conflict and Structure~
Arlynn has been offered a job in the big city and tells her friend. Her friend wants to know what she's thinking. Ryan overhears the conversation and thinks she's going for the job. Doesn't want to be what holds Arlynn back. He's hurt because he thinks this is the end.
Conclusions~
You did well writing this one. I would have like to see the fight instead of what brings them into the coming conflict. You've got a conflict coming between these two. I can't wait to see what happens.
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