Dear Em<3 – Welcome to Writing.com. I am glad you are a part of this amazing writing community now. I enjoyed reading "No one's There"  and I am glad to offer a few of the thoughts I had while reading your poem.
 
  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
‘Nam 1968, a few days after thanksgiving. Heat on the Ben Hoa airstrip sitting at a thousand degrees, bolts of lightning hitting so much stuff on the ground, my 707 “Freedom Bird” won’t land to take me home. One girl friend out of three is left after 18 months at war and she is holding a two hundred dollar check for me in San Francisco; unfortunately she’s only that check to me now as she’s found girls to be a better love. And sadly as I press my head between my knees suddenly more afraid of nature than any other enemy, I don’t blame her… Just a dozen such memories that sprung up as I read your tribute to extreme hopelessness.
 
  THEME
 
In the lonely times of life it is grounding to think about someone who will take us out of our most desperately hopeless state. Millions of communications a day convince us that there is someone out there - a hero, heroine, savior, a love that will complete us, make us whole and free from the dark thoughts of enduring life without someone to adore, hold and cherish.
 
  STRUCTURE
 
The poem is written in free form with a variety of tones and rhythms. The images are based on a narrative form that clearly focus on what the author is feeling and experiencing both externally and internally. The effect works to make me feel the haunting ache that comes from my loneliest, most desperately solitary times.
 
  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
While hoping for hope the words dig into my soul to find reflection and my favorite moment was:

But, it would be nice if someone noticed.
If they saw that I was hurting and they tried to stop it.
Then (I) my only comfort wouldn't be my own words.
Feeling at home in someone's warm embrace would be the greatest thing to ever occur./c}

Would it be okay to say this happened for me. After some tragic attempts. It turned out okay. And this central vision of your poem is the truth. When experienced in the fullness of what you describe everything else pales in comparison.
 
 
  SUGGESTIONS
I experienced a lot of cathartic release from reading your words. The tone and reflective power in what you have created is great and I am not sure of a way to improve on it. Well done.

 
  IN SUMMARY
 
"No one's There"  opens up a moment in time for me, a moment that unfortunately was repeated many many times until,.. well that is another story for another time. Be well, be safe! Thank you for sharing your gift. Write On!
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
 

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