Dear sandyb59 – Welcome to Writing.com. I am glad you are a part of this amazing writing community now. I enjoyed reading "Invalid Item"  and I am glad to offer a few of the thoughts I had while reading your poem.
 
  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
I envy those who can capture the essence of some social malady in a lyrical rant. The tone and feel of the words seem to reflect the oddity of knowing someone and yet having them masked forever. All I actually know of them is what they have written. Strange to think that marriages in the 17th century were forged by written communication alone.
 
  THEME
 
Social Media’s predecessor was the chat room. Hardly before the internet was done incubating chat rooms popped up for those whose identity was fully cloaked and yet enjoyed interacting with others whose identity was in every way fake. The most terrifying words in those days was “I think we should meet.” When it is all mean condescending arrogant rhetoric that tears away at relationship instead of build it up….yikes!
 
  STRUCTURE
 
The poem is written with an easy open free form of prose. The images have impact as they are barbed with skin pealing verbs that keep the pace of the narrative flowing along at a swift pace.
 
  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
As the nature of the “Big Wheel” is outlined I can’t help but chuckle along with the poet and this was my favorite moment:

I know you scoff at me,
talk trash behind my back,
because you can get away with it,
but deep down
I also know you envy me

Isn’t it true that when the bully is unmasked at the core of their character is a pitiful measure of envy?
 
 
  SUGGESTIONS
 
The poem, as written, I believe accomplishes its task of shaming the “Big Wheel” and those who have similar life experiences. My only suggestion would be to give your readers examples of the “Big Wheel’s” communication ineptness. I think your poem borders on hilarity and a snap shot of the interior action of an actual chat room might expand its appeal to readers who only have a foggy notion of what a chat room actually is. Just a thought.

  IN SUMMARY
 
"Invalid Item"  is a scathing response to the “lord of the chat room” who may thrive more as a belittling tyrant in the cyber sphere than as a real responsible person in the real world. Thank you for sharing your gift. Write On!
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
 

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