Dear R.King – Welcome to Writing.com. I am glad you are a part of this amazing writing community now. I enjoyed reading "Winter"  and thought I would give your poem a bit of a review.
 
  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
The wonder of winter takes a vivid imagination to comparatively appreciate. Or is it we appreciate the winter ironically. No. We appreciate the winter, and as it settles in we indeed have the vision to find joy in the longest darkest season of the year.
 
  THEME
 
On a winters day, flushed with the chill and the wind, we find a new kind of reverence for the frosty season. Being in the chill is to experience new life as the most popular seasons of the year look on from a very safe distance.
 
  STRUCTURE
 
The poem is written in free verse and mixed rhythms. The tone and pace is light and each image is based in the author’s actual experience.
 
  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
I could feel the chill with each line and this was one of my favorite moments:
The green of the grasses glistening
The sun bouncing off each blade sending light to all corners
They look different somehow
 
There is distinct movement. Somehow the sun is magic making each blade of grass more distinct. There is a time element in this scene that isn’t spelled out, but is there none-the-less. Only in a moment when time is irrelevant can one take a precious heart beat to stop and examine the beauty of a winter’s magic moment 
  SUGGESTIONS
 
There are some strong hints in the images of the poem of why you suddenly find joy in the winter, but I’m not sure you made it all the way to the fullest impact you could have enjoyed. I think it would help to put the last line after the fourth to the last line. My eyes watering …around my neck. And instead of using the pronoun “you,” keep the poem in the first person, “me”. We can still experience your revelations through you and relate to what you are saying. Then you are different, and now you know it is not as bad. It makes your words maintain their lyrical quality and avoids an editorial conclusion that might close off your reader’s imagination. Just a thought.

  IN SUMMARY
 
"Winter"  opens the possibility of reviewing ones preconceived notion of winter. Is it the cold, dark harbinger of death that one might imagine looking at the stark, barren landscape or are there signs of life that make me wonder - what is my winter anyway? Nicely done. Write On!
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
 

You responded to this review 04/14/2020 @ 7:37pm EDT

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