Dear Blackheart – Welcome to Writing.com. I am glad you are a part of this amazing writing community now. I enjoyed reading "Premonition of death"  and thought I would give your article a bit of a review.
 
  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
What does one do with what seems to be a severe premonition? Especially when it is about the ones we care about no matter how much time has passed? Maybe there are more questions than revelations in this piece, but at the same time the facts in the experience make the need to ask the questions all the more compelling.
 
  THEME
 
A love of a long time passed is the focus of the author’s premonitions. The premonitions are compelling enough the author is determined to find out what is going on in the life of an ex-girlfriend who he has not seen in 30 years.
 
  STRUCTURE
 
The article is written in the first person narrative. The facts of the premonition are inter mixed with the author’s emotional responses to feelings of love an concern for an old flame and the actions taken to make sure she is okay.

 
  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
How compelling is the draw to go back and meet up once more with a woman who has now obviously closed the door to any more contact. And yet…? This was my favorite moment:

“I tried to dismiss the feelings I was experiencing and just forget about it but a month later I was struck with intense thoughts about her that left me overwhelmed with anxiety. I went for a walk to burn off the stress. “

Whatever has caused the distance between the two lovers, the connection is strong enough to cross all time barriers with a message from another dimension. Many written works, fiction and non-fiction deal with the admonitions from another realm. I have had these same experiences, but not nearly as intense. The only record I know of what you have experienced is in the Bible. Without going too deep into my spiritual beliefs I would just suggest a reading of the Book of Daniel might serve you well. He was a prophet whose dreams gave him messages from another dimension for his day and time, and yet they often disturbed him to the point of sickness. Most Biblical scholars agree that all of Daniel’s dreams have come to pass.

 
 
  SUGGESTIONS
 
What you have written about has a tremendous appeal for readers across all generations. It is not fantasy. It is your own experience. My only suggestion would be to expand your experience into a full-fledged article by seeking out ways to explain how these premonitions awakened something in your soul. I have read about so many of these kinds of experiences, but yours is so unique in the intensity of detail and the emotions it stirred up in you. Your writing is stellar and I think expanding the narrative would make it a very marketable piece.

  IN SUMMARY
 
"Premonition of death"  draws us into a tale that touches on the outskirts of the super natural, as though foretold events that have the potential to come to pass could be the stimulus for a man to seek out an old love. The beauty in the story is that every fact comes from one who has experienced the touch from another realm. Write on!
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
 

You responded to this review 04/04/2020 @ 5:13pm EDT

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