Hello Sijil !

I'm glad to review another one of your poems.

VOICE, TONE, DICTION:

This was very interesting. It was written in second person, talking to an unknown "you" and the tone was scary, somber, and suspenseful. The diction was good.

SOUND PATTERNS:

The internal rhymes were GREAT, I really loved those. However, the first two lines don't contain that pattern. It only begins in the third line, and continues until the end. The third line has the internal rhyme couplet of cease/peace, the fourth has awaken/shaken and core/before, and the last line has fears/tears. Brilliant, but the first two lines don't have this and sound off compared to the rest.

LINE STRUCTURE: LINE BREAKS, METER, REPETITION:

Again, the meter is consistent and uniform in lines 3-5, but lines 1-2 just don't have a flow. I love the content and the message, but since there's meter and rhyme in the latter part of the poem, I'd like to see it in the former.

FAVORITE LINES:

"...creeping in through the cracks in your mind."
Wow! Powerful.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

The imagery was stunning in this poem. I could see myself writhing in bed as I go through another horrible nightmare, or even worse, an episode of sleep paralysis. That hasn't happened in a while though, thank goodness, but this poem definitely brought up the memories! You took something so simple as having a nightmare and spun a beautiful word web that was like music to the ears. You're very gifted and I hope you take my constructive criticism as a sign that I like your work and think it can be slightly improved upon. Again, great job!

Thanks for sharing your talent with us, and keep writing!