I found your poem on the Read a Newbie page and I'm happy to send you a review today.
INITIAL REACTION:
When I got to the end of the poem, I was smiling.
SOUND PATTERNS:
I like the rhyming scheme of ABCB, and the rhymes themselves were subtle and creative.
LINE STRUCTURE: LINE BREAKS, METER, REPETITION:
The meter flows well and the lines are the perfect length.
FAVORITE LINES:
"Even dimensions bend from his mind"
Great choice of words there!
OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I love the metaphors all throughout this poem. Most lines are ambiguous enough to have more than one meaning and I really like that characteristic in poetry. The subject of the poem itself is ambiguous (which I love!) because it could literally be the narrator's father being described, or it could be God or the Universe or whatever Higher Power the narrator believes in. That kind of duality in the interpretation is what makes good poems great, and you've done that here, whether or not it was your intention! Love it. I look forward to seeing more work from you.
Thanks for sharing your talent with us, and keep writing!
You responded to this review 03/24/2020 @ 5:05am EDT
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