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*SwordR*I was drawn to the title as I enjoy legends and fantasy. This short story is like a summary of a potential longer tale. I liked the concept of the man on a journey and becoming a legend but I am also curious to hear more about his trip.

The description of the man with his gear is vivid and gives me the impression of a bard or explorer.

*Quill* I wonder if, instead of "village's people" you could simply say "villagers" and also the phrase beginning with "being tired...." should come before "decided to..."

The word "amoung" should be "among" I think. *Wink*

*Books1* I wondered in your description of the mountain, what exactly "wonderfully dangerous" looked liked. I think specific details would make the passage more vital. Is the traveller from the same village near the mountain, with the special powers? I take it he is bored with life near the mountain. I wanted to know more, like his name and more about the towns folks and powers. *Smile*

If he documented everything but no one saw him, how do they know he wrote things?

*Star*This is a good idea for a longer tale. Thanks for sharing your vision.

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