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 No destination no journey Open in new Window. [E]
Lots of people are lost, it sounds annoying but it's the truth.
by Bold Attitude Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Delight*This piece expresses a philosophical opinion and you could use Philosophy or Opinion as one of your genre choices.*Wink*
I like how you contrast the differences in the way folks think about life and thought may influence their way.

The free verse style fits the theme and reflective theme. Bits of rhyme and repeated letters assist the flow.

*Quill* I notice you repeat destination a number of times and wonder if it is for emphasis or if a synonym might work for variety. *Wink*

*Quill* I saw a few typos or glitches that you may want to look at:
In the line "Few knows the road", a typo: drop the s in knows.

Line 8 needs a capital letter as you are putting caps on every line.

Something is missing in ""I have been to and fro the road on several journey"? and journey needs to be "journeys".

In "who knows their way", drop the s on Knows. *Wink* I think you need a capital letter I in the last line.

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