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| (3.5)  Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Greetings, Vjay! This isn't bad for a short horror piece. The idea isn't all that unique though, and the ending seemed a bit rushed. We really don't know what happened to the one who was chasing, or even why he was chasing. There was also a lot more telling than showing in this, which you could fix with some more description. Here's a link for information about that: ""Telling" Vs. "Showing" - Part 1" As for your English, yes it's broken, but it's not so bad that we can't read it. Oddly enough the spelling and grammar were pretty good! Keep on writing on, Vjay, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here! PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course. PSS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies" and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.
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