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 |  | Pretty Ugly Words  [18+] Poetry and prose for contests. The occasional "slider" poem.  |
| (5.0)| Hi IceSkatingSugarCube , I am reviewing this on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . This is also part of "I Write in 2019" . Please remember these views are purely my own and any advice is given with the sole intention of being helpful. First Impressions: Ahh, this is a mushy love poem. But I absolutely adore it. As I first read through, I could relate to just about everything you say in it. The first verse, in particular, made me smile. Voice/Tone: The tone is filled with love, but it is also lighthearted and honest. I really like the idea of your feelings still remaining "young and new" because that's exactly how it is. When that disappears, you know you're in trouble. The second verse is a little more serious in tone. And the last line affirms the love you feel for your partner: "you are my true love, indeed!" That's great. I don't know about you, but I find it really difficult to write about love and happy feelings. It's much easier to write about heartache and pain. So, I really admire this poem's sentiment and, actually, your honesty in it. Mechanics: You have followed the Lento form perfectly. The rhymes are spot-on, and you even managed to rhyme the first and third lines as well as the second and fourth. Rhyming can be tricky, so I love how easy you make it look in this poem. Rhythm: The rhythm is great. Because of the rhymes, the poem zips along at a nice pace with no bumps along the way. It is smooth and a pleasure to read. My Favourite Part: "We're older, grayer, and have more debt / and I still absolutely adore you." This is so true. It could have been written about my hubby and me. I really smiled when I read it. I also really like the lighthearted tone of the poem. So, although it is about your love for your partner, it isn't really all that mushy. It just sounds real, genuine. And I like that. Great writing. A thoroughly enjoyable poem. It's so nice to get this little insight into you. Brilliant! Keep writing! Choconut    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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