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 Electoral College...Abolish? Open in new Window. [E]
Politics, Trump/Clinton, Electoral College, Debate, Society, Democracy
by Jkenley1 Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Jkenley,
This is a wonderful essay. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the essay. Here in Canada we are going out to vote on October 21, so I was really interested in your topic and began to read to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about how the manner of electing the President of the United States was created and its effectiveness. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)does produce-Should read "do produce".

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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