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May God bless both of us as we grow as writers together!


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concrete_angel,

Well, you and I approached the Taboo Words Contest using the August prompt of Solitude very differently. I wrote "Single..." Open in new Window. -- it is what happened when I tried to write about solitude without using any of the forbidden words. I must admit, my short poem makes solitude sounds lonely and solitude can actually be quite pleasant.

Pleasant is not the feeling your words evoke.

I loved the opening lines of your poem:

We're not the only ones
dropping words like paper boats
into the stream of time.


The words you write seem full of angst.

I just noticed as I read through your words again—you bring the boats back into your poem at the end with the line: steadfast feet in fragile boats.

Somehow, you use the prompt of solitude to focus on the fact that all of us, although alone, walk the same path. Am I reading your words correctly? I hope so.

Your words made my heart ache.

No suggestions for improvement. It seems profound already.




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