Hello Mastiff ,

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
What a fantastic piece of flash fiction you crafted here! And in only 185 words too! Well done!

ADDITIONAL COMMENTS:
I remember reading a book review you wrote last week (I'd already written mine but you captured my only issue with the novel in a better way than I'd even formed it in my head) and thinking, I want to read a story by this person! And then, here you are as the author before me in "I Write in 2019." Serendipity!

I thoroughly enjoyed reading your "What's Wrong" story. I was mildly interested at the beginning but my interest grew more and more with each sentence. And the end was a perfect surprise for me as a reader.

Your story is well done, flows nicely and evoked strong feelings in me as I read it. It brought me even more appreciation for you as a writer and for flash fiction as genre.

I liked how you structured your story.

I didn't notice any mistakes of any kind in your poem.

Your story is so well written that I have no suggestions for improvement.

Thank you for sharing your exciting story with the writing.com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!

PWheeler




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .