Hi KingKitsune,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of depression and anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Noya will handle her career decline well. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about an aging performer who wonders if she is past her prime. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.