Hello!

I was just stopping by and thought I would leave a short note. Good job with your story! I thought you did a good job meeting the challenge of the prompt. I liked the nature of the conversation; I thought it flowed very well and naturally.

The only thing that I thought was a little off was the very end. It seemed to me it would have been more logical for them to get more food and then say something like: "Once we finish the desserts, we'll finish talking about the costumes...unless we're too full..." Something like that. It just seemed odd that they were still going to be at the party, eating and sharing food, but the last thing they discussed was calling each other the next day to talk about the costumes. But that's just me.

Otherwise, everything else seemed on point. I didn't see any errors in grammar, spelling, and punctuation, so that's also a plus.

Congratulations on your win today and keep up the good work!

Write on!

Elizabeth John

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .