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Keeper of the Womb Open in new Window. [ASR]
Surprise! We're not in as much control as we'd like to believe!
by Genipher Author Icon
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Genipher,

I am finally getting around to writing a review for your entry in September's round of "The Christian Writing Contest" Open in new Window.. The first thing I want to tell you is: I love your Title and your Brief Description! They fit perfectly with your essay and they would easily attract a reader's attention and draw them to your work!

Your introduction is a powerful statement—it even throws a devout Christian like myself—but it is in line with the Biblical references you supply. It saddens me though as I think of all the children born into sad situations like starvation or abuse. Sometimes it is hard to reflect on the state of affairs in the world and the Sovereignty of God—but I firmly do believe God is large and in charge.

Now, I sound like I am writing a commentary instead of a review. It is very hard to separate content from literary quality when reading and reviewing. Let me try to focus on the writing now:

I struggle as I am reading your essay and trying to write this review. I have no solid suggestions for improvement but I have the sense this essay needs a bit more. What am I missing?

Perhaps it needs more definition. I am thinking along the lines of opening and closing with softer and less definitive statements. Sort of like: "Let us explore this subject together". You can pose your question and provide the examples you have given us in the framework of searching out the answer with your reader and then allowing your reader to come to a conclusion at the end.

I don't know if that makes any sense but I do know that you have given me food for thought with your essay. What part of reproduction has God put in our hands. You have me asking myself that question...




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