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Rated: E | (5.0)
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STRUCTURE

I like the way there is no line break. A verse poem would not have suited the words, in my opinion. I enjoyed the little punctuation as well. The commas seem to be there for the reader to catch their breath and not there for the poet to manipulate the reader into reading the poet a specific way. I thought the line count was very thoughtful as well and liked the blue font. It really suited the sea and shore poem. My one suggestion would be make the font two tone. Yellow to represent the shore and blue to represent the sea, but that is only a suggestion, take it of leave it.

TONE

The tone is easy going and relaxing and suits the poem and the words very well. It reminds me of the song, 'lazy on a Sunday afternoon. It has got that lazy vibe to it and it wants me to reach for the hamoch.

STYLE

The style is very freestyle and really suits it. The lines are different lengths like it is too much bother to unify them but, on a sunny afternoon work and being unified is the furthest thing on most peoples mind. I liked the fact it is messy as it gives the poem its authenticity.

TITLE

The title and the poem go well together. The title tells the reader what the poem is about and there are no surprises, which I like.

IMAGE

I can see a family sitting on the beach. While the children play in the sea, the mother reads her romance book and the father snoozes in a deck chair.

FINAL THOUGHTS

Great poem and thank you for sharing.

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