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Review of Angels and demons  Open in new Window.
Review by Choconut Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Andy~hating university Author Icon

I am reviewing this on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Open in new Window.. This is the second review from your Sort Centred Caramel package.

Please remember these views are purely my own, and any advice given is with the sole intention of being helpful.

First Impressions: I love diamante poems! They are one of the few structured forms I enjoy to write. I love the juxtaposition of two elements; in this case an angel and a demon. I also love how the poem looks on the page. The diamond shape is really appealing.

Mechanics: Diamantes have only seven lines, and it's so easy to overlook them because of that. But, when done well (which this poem is!) they leave a big impact on the reader. You have stuck perfectly to the diamante form; with the first half of the poem referring to angels, and the second half, to demons. The key to writing a good diamante is to remember that every single word counts, and finding the right ones is imperative. You have used exactly the right words in this one. The word I, at first, wasn't sure about is "tempestuous." It didn't feel like a word I would associate with demons. It's a little too mild. However, after reading through a few times, I can't deny it sounds fab. Actually, it's probably the stand-out word, for me. I like how it sounds in this poem.

My Favourite Part: The alliteration in the lines containing adjectives is clever: "peaceful, pure" and "malevolent, maleficent" bring out the characteristics they are describing really nicely. I love the subject matter. Angels vs. demons ... What's not to love?

This poem works works so well. Everything about it just ... fits. It's pleasing to the ear when read aloud, it's clever, it's interesting. Plus, I know a lot of work will have gone into writing it, and finding the right words. Great work, Andy.

Keep writing!

Choconut

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