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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Ahoy, Lindsay!
Considering how short this is, it really isn’t too bad. You did a good job with the dialogue, which is what holds the story up (so far); it was realistic and natural.
I don’t know if you were going for humor with this, but I don’t think a 1936 Ford V8 is going to be doing 90 miles an hour, and even if it did, I doubt there would be a speedometer that read 90. I don’t think they had electric clocks in them either.
Overall, though you do have a good prelude to something a lot longer. It has all the components of the basic time machine/paranormal story. But I just don’t think you went into enough detail with it and kind of left the reader dangling at the end.
Kee ponw ritin gon, Lindsay, HAPPY NEW YEAR, and...

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