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 | My Fishing Success  [E] A fictional narrative about a boy falling in love with fishing.  |
| (4.5)| Greetings, A. Herschberger! This is a really nice piece about something your father turned you onto as a child and you managed to make a career out of. And what's more is that you're doing something you love. Not many people get to do that! As a child myself, I used to fish for silver salmon up in Seward, Alaska years ago. Every year my father would enter us into The Seward Silver Salmon Derby where they'd tag two fish for $5K and one for $10K. The derby would run for 2 weeks, and the $10K fish wasn't caught too often. Seward was a small town of about 2 or 3 thousand people, but the derby would bring in 2 or 3 more thousand from the 'lower 48' trying to catch those tagged fish. They'd spend thousands of dollars on hotels and tackle and chartering boats to go miles out into the bay trying to catch one of the fish. The greatest thing I remember about it was nobody had caught the $10k fish in years, and those folks from the 'lower 48' were once again going way out into the bay. But this one year a brother and sister who lived right there in Seward went out in a rowboat and caught that $10K fish! The really neat thing is that their family was on welfare, and they caught the fish by the buoy just 100 yards outside of the harbor! I loved that, and I could just see the looks on those guys who were spending all their $ going out miles on chartered boats, only to see their efforts all for naught! Anyway, that's one of my favorite memories about fishing. But I digress. I really enjoyed your piece, and I'm glad you found your calling. There's nothing like sitting by a creek with a cold beer and enjoying nature while waiting for your pole to bend! Great spelling and telling. A comment and a couple of tiny niggles: Forty years in a daycare? Yeah, I can see how you'd have some 'pent up energy'!  '...an apply cinnomon orchard(;) while Dad froze outside shoveling...' (should be a comma) '...became more(,) and more thrilled.' (don't need that comma) Kee ponw ritin gon, A. Herschberger, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here! PS-You might want to get your biography set up so we can know a little something more about you (hobbies, favorite authors/books, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course. PPS-Since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies" to get a feel of Writing.Com and introduce yourself to the community!
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