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Greetings, Shade of Mirrors!
This is pretty neat, considering how short it is. I like how you've compared the family of dogs to a real family of people, and the whole piece has a nice, heartwarming feel to it. The idea of the 'Mama' and 'Papa' dogs playing fetch with 'The master' while their brood scolds them for leaving them was a nice touch, and you couldn't have ended it any better.
If I didn't know better, I'd think you were actually watching this all take place while you wrote this! (I'm right, huh? *Bigsmile*)
'Then another and another until the whole lawn is littered with a litter of pups playing with leaves.' (Great line!)
And I like how you even added a short description of autumn to it at the end!
Well done, my friend! I'm glad your friends urged you to share your writing! You have talent!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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