Greetings, Hayden! For your first piece on here I thought this was really good! I realize you have this under 'satire', and perhaps it is. But the style you wrote it in is so serious that I'm not sure if you were being satirical or not! Either way, it's certainly some food for thought! We are indeed a melting pot of ethnicity, and it's only going to get more diverse as the generations move on. I'm not sure about erasing the 'American' tie though. I understand your reasons, but I just don't think it would work. What if somebody's father was from Russia while their mother was from America? Would they then be 'Russian-American'? 'American-Russian'? Whichever one it is seems a little oxymoronic to me. Like I said, Hayden, this is very well written. The spelling and grammar were flawless, and the prose was professional! 'An incredible .04% of the students at Arizona State University' (.04%? Incredible! ) Great job, my friend! Kee ponw ritin gon, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here! PS-You might want to get your biography set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite authors/books, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course. PPS-Since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies" to get a feel of Writing.Com and introduce yourself to the community!
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