Hi textual, I am reviewing your contest entry "A Day in the Park" here on Wdc.

♥ This short story is about a man? (I am assuming that the narrator is a male) who tells the story of another man named Brian's struggle in Harlem. Brian was different from most people, and his differences often garnered him unnecessary and humiliating reactions, but Brian never let other peoples opinions of him affect him. He stoically endured.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: Your short seems to be well written, but a few sentences gave me pause. For example: Like I said I was homeless so I know... Homelessness is a disease, in fact, it's the same disease old age is.

I am not completely sure why ... I don't think there is a need for it.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I did not spot any common grammar or spelling errors.

♥ Overall: Honestly, for me, the short was a bit hard to read because I could connect emotionally with your character, neither the author or Brian. There was something missing, but I believe that this story has the making of a great one, you just need to add a little more emotion to it.

This review was given freely in thanks for a writing that was written freely