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 | The Day My World Fell Apart.  [E] A Break-up Letter from a boyfriend to his ex-girlfriend....  |
| (3.5)| This is your local Simply Positive Reviewer, here! Your writing has been selected for review, as part of Simply Positive's mission to bring more light on Authors here at WDC! First Impressions: Hello, and thanks for allowing me to read and review your very brief but powerful story entitled: "The Day My World Fell Apart." . In reading this story, one finds out that through no uncertain amount of heartbreak, this world had plenty enough of same to go around. It always does. But this story has plenty within its writing to help us understand the why, the wherefore all of this came about...We read first the fun things that came out of that relationship between a guy and his girl. They had a fun time together, awakening in the AM with a greeting text, and at night with a goodnight text as well. Things that pinned the relationship down to something like normal in anyone's book. But alas, things like relationships don't always last in this world, and though that is a platitude, I dare anyone to come forward and claim somehow that they only had one relationship in Life.... If so, I would say that person is lucky...if they are still alive!  But trust that this story doesn't go on its merry way - not by any means. There is a lot of pain here, and the author speaks for the person in this writing with a clear point that I think rings true: He says that when it ended - the relationship that is - he felt that his girl might have told him clearly why it was ending. That in leaving him, he felt at least that honesty would be the best policy all told. And true to form, who in life wouldn't mind if their soulmate would have been honest, up front and straight to the point about the situation? I know I would feel the same way... Overall Impact: The person in the story admits to problems - plenty of problems. But this alone does not nor did not subtract from his earnestness, his honest pursuit of what he felt would have been love in hand. Lots of people have troubles, last I checked. And yet... over time, sometimes people with those problems can overcome them. Ever have a problem that you recently overcame? Such is the angle the author takes in this story, for believe it or not, there is a small amount of Hope in this writing as well... Errors: Granted, I never was meant to be an English teacher, and I do not intend to start now. But learning to put sentences together in a more connected, smoother way would go far towards HIGHLIGHTING this author's clear talent as a writer. Can't say it better than this! For misspellings, just use the spellchecker here on WDC!  Summation: A good story here. I mean, there is a lot of well-meaning words, and lots of heart-felt emotions here as well. I think that if the author IS the person in this story, they should take note that writing this took strength, and conviction too. Strength and conviction to see to it to face tomorrow in ways others simply cannot. And that is a huge gain if there is one. A huge plus. KEEP WRITING! Once again, thank you for providing me the opportunity to read and review for Simply Positive; this also has been written in affiliation with
Yours, "Dr.J"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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