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Hello, Cadie here reviewing on behalf of "Game of Thrones" I hope that you have had a productive time on Writing.com (WDC). This is a great community to be a part of. Overall Impressions~ This poem is okay. I don't understand it completely. The first stanza describes being a penguin. I'm not sure how the emu and ostrich are the penguins friends as they live in two different parts of the world. The sentence that says They have wings that never kiss the ether This doesn't make sense. I don't know what this has to do with birds. As Man with bosom-bride but not touch her What does this have to with penguins. How does this fit with the life of a penguin? In continuing with the poem, a human friend makes sense because there are those who want to help the penguins and their habitat be safe from over fishing. The human prayed to become a bird to help protect the birds, yet the penguin hopes that the human turns into a penguin. I think this poem needs some more details in order to be better. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing. I hope to read more of your work in the future. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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