Hello, Cadie here reviewing on behalf of "Game of Thrones"  I hope you are having a good time here on Writing.com (WDC). This is a great community to get into. I hope this review helps you.

Overall Impressions~
You've written this poem well. The theme makes sense throughout the piece. You've described how she lives well. This poem could easily be turned into a story about a father and his little girl who deal with not having a wife and mother. It's nice that Dad has his parents to help him out with watching the little girl. If you decide to turn this into a story, a question you might look at answering is what happened to her mother? How does the dad play both mom and dad for the daughter? When did he decide that he needed help from his parents? Do the mother's parents help with the daughter?

Recommendations~
While I would say this is great just the way it is. There's always room for improvement. If you were to rewrite this poem, you might add more details on how the father takes care of his girl. How is he her Knight in Shining Armor. What happens when she grows up?

Conclusions~
You've got a well written poem. You are a good author.

Thank you for sharing, Keep writing.


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .