Hello, Cadie here reviewing on behalf of "Game of Thrones" . I hope that you are enjoying your time here on Writing.com (WDC). Overall Impressions~ This is an interesting poem. It seems to tell the story of a lady who fell for a "bad boy." I can infer they got married, had a baby and in order to keep him in line she offers him a job. This job is to keep the bad boy around so that their daughter is not fatherless, although she lives in fear for some reason anyway. Recommendations~ There's a good story within this poem. You could tell the story of what happened to this girl how she met and fell for the bad boy. How does he change her and how does she change him? How does the child change both of them? Does the bad boy accept the changes the girl is making in his life? Conclusions~ The poem you've written is good just the way it is. I don't know what you did with the prompt. I infer that the last line of organiser is "As months turn into years." You created a life with your poem. Your poem reads well. Thank you for sharing, Keep writing. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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