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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
This was hilarious. I love it! The infomercial was fantastic and I could see myself sitting there waiting for that price to come up! Well done.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
The rhyming you used to describe what the product does. That worked so well in this story.

PLOT~
Like any other infomercial, this one is doing its damnedest to sell the product and refuses to give the price, even knowing whoever may be watching is waiting for that one key part of the information.

~DESCRIPTION~
This was a really good read. I was hooked and drawn in immediately having seen my fair share of infomercials. And I admit to hanging around watching one waiting on the elusive price that seemed like it would never come. You played that part out beautifully, only adding to it as the infomercial was basically a tease to its audience, knowing that is what they were waiting for, yet never gives it.

DIALOG~
All dialogue and it worked wonderfully. I didn't need to see the watcher, or the person speaking to be glued to this piece. Besides, I would say fifty percent of the voices are probably all the same guy, moving one product and then another. You know you recognize that voice from somewhere as they delicately work to sell you a product you most likely don't even need. Great job showing that. You really made this work.



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