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| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Creeper Of The Realm  OVERALL IMPRESSION - This was great. I kept wondering where the title was going to come into play within the story and when it finally did, I couldn't stop laughing over it. Kudos!! WHAT I LIKED BEST - The fantastic ending I didn't see coming. I did realize something would be in that bucket, but never would I have guessed what was actually there. PLOT~ Hernando is totally smitten with Carmen. He watches her, heartbroken over her treatment of him, yet she still mesmerizes him. He watches as she fills a bucket from the well, everything about her calling to him, torturing him. When she raises the bucket to empty it into the pitcher, she screams, drops everything and runs away, giving Hernando the opportunity to take the fist out of the bucket before anyone else sees it. CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~ Hernando is a sculptor with payback on his mind, though even doing this pains him. Carmen is the most beautiful girl he's ever seen, and yet she took his affections and humiliated him in front of friends and family. He cannot let that go and sets his plan in motion, and Carmen easily walked right into it. You used the prompt words well and had great elements of description in this short piece. From the very first sentence, you drew me right into the scene. Great job.   
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You responded to this review 08/24/2017 @ 5:18pm EDT