Hi Paul, I am reviewing your story "It" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ This was a humorous short about a man and the phone which he liked to called, "it". The man in question has technical issues which does not allow him to enjoy the technology.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: There were a few grammar and spelling errors. I suggest that you do another re-read of your short to correct them.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I spotted a few spelling and grammar mistakes. For example the last line, "I'm to old to be..." That should read: "I'm too old to be..." You have simple things like that, that should be corrected/fixed within this short.

♥ Overall: I enjoyed this short and how you went from the time the man received a phone when he was young until the point of him receiving an iPhone in his seventies, I enjoyed the time loop, and technological advance through time. Thank you so much for writing this, I look forward to reading more of your work in the very near future.

This review was given freely in thanks for a writing that was written freely

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