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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
Whoa, I seriously thought he intended to kill her, and then...SHOCK

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
The twist at the end, sort of. God that was really good. Loved that part.

PLOT~
Sandra knows she's in a loveless marriage, and that Jared really married her for her money. It's Saturday morning and she has her usual tennis match with Ann at the club. Jared tells her he wants to go with her and watch, and Sandra wonders if maybe he does love her after all. She of course tells him to come. Jared switches out her tennis balls and they head to the club. Once there, he sits waiting for Ann's balls to be sent off into the woods so he can watch the surprise he has in store for his wife.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Sandra who flip flops when it comes to Jared, one minute knowing he didn't marry her for love, the next wondering if he had developed feelings for her after all their years together. Jared who is trying to surprise his wife by rigging the tennis balls, only they have a monumental outcome.

I was on the edge of my seat when she went to hit that ball, wondering what exactly was going to happy. I never expected confetti, or that it would be the end like that. Some surprises can kill you.

DIALOG~
Dialog worked well. Both the inner dialog really gave a good glimpse of your characters thoughts and actions.


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