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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
Nice story of two friends being stranded together who seem to take it all in stride.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
The story of how they wound up in the situation they found themselves in. It made me laugh and I could easily picture Tim pounding on his chest and rocking the boat off balance.

PLOT~
Tim and Bill are stranded on an island after Tim was messing around playing Tarzan, fell over board, hit his head and that sent Bill in after him. Tim is struggling to remember it all, but with Bill's prodding, he does.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Tim and Bill seem like really good friends who stand by on another. You gave good descriptions of the events that led to the fall, with Tim beating on his chest and grabbing a vine to go for a pretend swing, but all he would up doing was hitting his head and falling unconscious. Now they are stuck on the island, and waiting for the sun to start to go down so they can go exploring together.

DIALOG~
I liked the flow of conversation between your two characters. A little teasing banter, but Tim does really seem grateful after learning that his friend saved him from drowning.


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