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A repository of all my writings for WDC's Game of Thrones.
by Jeff Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "Writing Challenge #1: A deserted island" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
Hey, Jeff. Nice job with this prompt. Being stranded with an ex-wife would certainly not be fun, but this worked well.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
You always use good details in your writing that really draws the reader in, and your main character's thoughts enhance it all.

PLOT~
Two exes are stranded on an island after his plane goes down. He is helping his ex-move to Jakarta to start a new life with a new guy. There is some bitterness about that, but they do what they can to survive. They make some headway getting ready to spend the night as nightfall approaches.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Good job giving me a glimpse of the small island in the middle of the ocean. It was easy to see him working on building the pyre and her out in the water trying to spear a fish for dinner. I wondered if the knife wasn't such a bad thing to her now that it was coming in handy.

DIALOG~
True to the bickering that exes go through, these two really kept it going with little barbs at one another. I felt so bad for him at the end as he thought about what a romantic setting they were in.

TECHNICAL~
After we dragged ourselves
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This would be my name.
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