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Rated: E | (4.0)
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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
Not a bad story about a down on his luck Jason searching for a job because he has mounting debt from college loans. I certainly understand that looming over one's head.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
His honesty. It is commendable that he would be so forth coming during a job interview, instead of lying just to get a job, even though it was in degree field.

PLOT~
Jason hates wearing a suit and tie, especially in the heat and heads off to a job interview. He hardly has a minute to wipe the sweat off his brow before being called into the meeting with three people. They ask questions and he answers, before the big question of why he wants to work at this firm, in particular, comes up. Jason is honest, saying he doesn't want to work for them, but needs a job to help pay back his student loans and to make a living. After treating himself to a good meal, a job opportunity presents itself.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Good descriptions of the job interview and what a hassle it all was for Jason. I could picture the scene in the private room as he was being questioned and how stuffy the three people were.

DIALOG~
This moved the story along well as Jason was prepared with his responses.

TECHNICAL~
of why you’re hear-here.

on law school and didn’t want

walked to toward

There were a few areas of missing words as well. My best advice would be to read it out load to catch those things.
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