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Rated: E | (4.0)
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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
Good job setting the scene of the short story as Baxter enlists the help of Jordan to help him find his buried treasure.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
I liked how the growth of the trees stood out as the perfect burial place for Baxter's treasure.

PLOT~
Jordan receives a phone call from his friend, Baxter, who is a tad frantic begging him to come over. When Jordan arrives he is shocked to see his friend with a shovel, digging one hole after another in his yard.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Baxter who forgets that he buried his earnings long ago and when he remembers he goes on an exhaustive search to find the box. Jordan wasted no time rushing over to help his friend in need and jumps in to help.

I found it funny that after hours of digging, one good glance around the yard pointed to the most obvious spot the box could be buried.

DIALOG~
Baxter's rushed speech during the phone call got Jordan's attention and he rushed over to see what was going on. Baxter's explanation of his buried treasure was enough to enlist his friends help, which moved your story along.

TECHNICAL~
No issues.
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