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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
You packed a lot into your short story as Jason was in search of a Rotormotor 675. I laughed at his great sense of direction and still they were up and down a street looking for the address. Good elements of humor added throughout.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
That Jason thought this was a better way to shop, yet ends up with a gadget he doesn't necessarily need.

PLOT~
Jason and Susan are searching up and down a street looking for an address. They argue about why he didn't just buy what he was looking for online, and his lack of having GPS as their search continues. Finally, the locate the address and Jason get out of the car to meet the seller. It isn't long before he returns with a different item.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Susan is a bit agitated that Jason is wasting their time shopping this way. Jason is adamant that this is the best way to shop and even points out that he won't be ripped off or talked into buying something he doesn't need from a salesman.

DIALOG~
Susan's annoyance played well during their conversation as they searched for the address. Jason was so quick to point out all of the reasons for shopping this way, and then suddenly realizes he was duped. That was a great way to end it. Good irony.


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