This short story was a great and enjoyable read. What you did with the prompt given was fantastic, it was a story that really kept the readers' attention, wondering how something like this was plausible let alone possible.



You really picked an interesting way to tell a story in a way that was captivating which a limited amount of words to use. Upon the first read, the twist at the end seems intriguing, yet still mysterious enough to read a second time. It truly was unbelievable the first time you read the story.



I think the flow of the story and the use of the prompt was well executed. You did a fabulous job with the limitations you had to work with for a class paper.



I thought you brought interest to the characters. My first question after reading it the first time was, "What did everyone see if they saw each other?" This was an excellent twist that is subtle but in your face at the same time. The story brought to mind more questions like, is this Jose fellow really Aztec royalty or something more? Was he waiting for George all along? I'm actually curious to see where this story might go from here, but I think it was a great read as is.








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