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Rated: E | (4.5)
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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
This was funny. Nice job with your prompt words for this short story.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
The ending as it came true and made me laugh.

PLOT~
Hera convinces Grayson and Red that if they look into the water they will see themselves minutes later in the future. They are on a question to get a gold watch into safe hands. Red is hesitant and Grayson jumps at the chance. When he sees that his golden watch will be stolen he vows to make sure that doesn't happen and tells Red to take a look to see what it revealed to him. Red steps up and sees himself, wet, saying he cannot believe what just happened and before he pulls away from looking down into the water, everything he saw comes true.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Hera who listens to their secret and takes matters into her own hands. Grayson who has possession of the watch, and even seeing that it will be stolen cannot stop it from happening. Red who doesn't think Hera can be trusted, and gets caught up in the future vision.

DIALOG~
I liked how what Red saw himself saying came back so quickly to bite him. Hera's opening line was a little creepy, as well as mysterious and made it hard for your two main characters to not give it a try.


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