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Wishful Illusions  Open in new Window. [18+]
Those who dare to reach beyond the written world
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
I'm a big fan of supernatural stories and loved this one. You showed Jace perfectly as he tried to make sense of what was happening and figure out who the girl was that showed an interest in him.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
Jace's willingness to believe that the things that were happening were real. It's so easy to dismiss these things, but he sought them out, even venturing into unknown territory.

PLOT~
Jace senses a presence near, one that touches him, teases him and he cannot seem to get enough of her. His mother is almost desperate to fix him up, even throwing a party to get single women there hoping he will take an interest in one of them. Jace can hear the woman, and they soon begin a dialog. He wants to know everything about her, what he sees, who she is. He goes up to his bedroom and drowns out the party, ready to get some answers to all of the questions in his mind.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Jace's impressions of her and his emotions were great. I could feel this excitement when she was near, and the disappointment when he couldn't sense her. I liked the scene of him trying to write it down and only getting one word before their conversation started, only to be interrupted. Is there more of this story? I'd love to keep reading and see where you take Jace. Though I did like the ending because it leaves your reader wondering and coming up with their own ideas as where Jace wound up once the story stopped.

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