Hi Rhon02, I am reviewing chapter 1 of your story "Like Toy Soldiers" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ This prelude is about retired veteran Charles Lucas and his attempt at whipping the poor recruits of the "Armed Forces Rescue division" into fighting shape after a botched rescue attempt that killed twenty-five tourists, but before training ends a fight happens, and from the ending of chapter one the reader believes that Lucas has been captured by the enemy.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: The chapter was well written. I have nothing to offer here.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I spotted no common grammar or spelling errors.

♥ Overall: This chapter was the beginning of something great. I really want to know what happens to retired veteran Lucas, what becomes of him and the soldiers beneath the man. I am hoping the next chapter reveals more, I think the soldiers have more in them than what their leader perceives. Thank you for writing something so interesting.

This review was given freely in thanks for a writing that was written freely.


House Greyjoy - "Game of Thrones"